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A Thing I Must Do (Free verse) by Dovina

Shoes and socks removed and carried I walked across the infield grass. At second base, I folded clothes and set them on the plate. Up somewhere in the darkness of bleachers in the night he sat watching me in moonlight silent in his jeans. A person hides in cotton and needs to open up reveal herself to the universe all secrets told and known. Turn on the lights and listen now This is me and who I am I stand for me, just me I refuse to cringe and run.

richa 4-Feb-05/10:23 AM
The 'show don't tell dictum' means that the poet must find images, or surface if you will, to convey what may be quite abstract. Now you can say 'you know that thing called hate they talk about, I feel that about trolls'. From this we know you hate trolls. Unfortunately we don't care because no one wants to know what a poet thinks about trolls. If you do not use the tools of the poet you are just talking arse and expecting us to care.




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