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Psalm of Wonder (Free verse) by Dovina

Surely not in vain My form from dust You made So gently shaped, designed Surely You would not decay Your craft on which You worked Back to common earth again Even a peevish boy Who forms a bowl from clay Seldom in a fit of anger Decides to smash his work Will He who formed the vessel Be it out of love or fancy In an afterthought destroy it? Would He who made a forest Complete with birds and fawns Then erupt a mountain To bury it in ash? Would He who loves a people Along an Asian coast Move the tranquil sea To drown it with a wave? How wondrous Your creations seem to me How trivial and common They must be to You

zodiac 4-Feb-05/4:08 AM
I don't understand how anything you've said really responds to my comment above. Would you mind clarifying?

If I get you right (and I'm not at all certain I do), things are heading in something like the following direction:

DOVINA: People (should) find God a hard guy to like because he often crushes them like insects with little or no warning, and probably no concern on his part (cf. your poem).

ZODIAC: But God knows those people are going to heaven, so he's not bound to care for their insectly earthly lives.

DOVINA: Who says there's a heaven just because there's a God?

ZODIAC: Most people.

DOVINA: That's because people want to believe God made a heaven. Maybe he didn't.

ZODIAC: Indeed maybe he didn't. It seems just as likely that he didn't as that he did. But considering that the point of this poem (or the only one I can imagine it having) is to make most people question why they think God is so swell (since he crushes people etc etc), then it's a bunk argument. Any person in the world put in that position is bound to say, Because he made a nice heaven for us to go to after we're crushed.

Incidentally, I know I'm paraphrasing something awful above. Please, please don't make the gist of your response that I've paraphrased something. You and I both know perfectly well what was really said, and if we forget, we have the comments above to reread. If you do, I'm afraid I can't be your friend anymore.

:-(




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