Dovina1 Feb 2005

Well, for starters, try “ask” in the first line. Nothing like bad grammar to tick off satin.

The second verse (lines 2 & 3) doesn’t hold ginger ale because when a pious person comes to death, he seldom says that, but rather glorifies God.

After that dismal beginning, it improves. The statements to the dead man are poignant, if futile, since he’s dead.

Wait a minute, he’s alive again in the “dispirited” verse. You must mean in the afterlife. Whatever, that aggravates your cause, don’t you think? Presuming an afterlife?

So here is the pious man arguing, presumably with Peter or some such Golden Gate Keeper, justifying his righteous life. But then it’s Death that laughs, so the whole thing is getting ethereal and weird.

The argument continues, but it seems futile. The man is already dead and in no position to change anything.
Other than that, it’s a fine fight.