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In Answer To Your Question (Prose Poem) by Dovina

Suppose I tell you I love you no matter what you do, that nothing you can do will make my love go away? Suppose I tell you I keep no logs of cruelties, broken promises, abuses, past or future? What if I tell you you can run to the ends of the earth and do the most horrible, unthinkable things, and if you come back, I’ll receive you with tears and a party? Suppose I say you don’t have to put on a mask, and it’s okay to be anything you are and I will never punish you, and when you mess up, I will never nag? What if you know my love isn’t based on how little wrong you do and you can hurt my heart but I will never hurt yours? What if I tell you there is no secret agenda, no trap door and no turning back? At such time as I can tell you this I will marry you.

Shuushin 28-Jan-05/12:20 PM
I think what you have is clearly expressing the idea, and the idea makes sense - just, yes - its more verbosely stated than is my preference.

Turns out that in most cases they are indeed promising more than they will deliver. Not sure how it is in Europe, but in the US more marriages fail than not.




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