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An Ode To Mr. Moon (Acrostic) (Acrostic) by Bhaskaryya

Illuminating the darkest of the nights Lonesome, in the vast sky he hovers Oblivious of time’s eternal flight Voyeur of the midnight lovers. Eternally his youth springs Yule mirth to barren autumn Onlooker’s delight, when wild geese spread their wings Under the silver midnight blossom. Kith of silver and kin of fire Alone yet, in oblivion he stands Surely the night’s unchallenged ‘Sire’ Traveling majestically across all earthly lands. Ubiquitous in each moment of time Revivifying the night with his light sublime Irradiating one and all he rests, in his perpetual youth’s prime. Acrostic Message: I Love You Kasturi.

Shuushin 25-Jan-05/2:27 PM
"Revivifying " don't see that one much. Consisten rhyming scheme, with a change on the refrain.

Kasturi is Indian, no?

You might want to trim some prepositions, maybe? Why do I harp on that so?




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