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A Better God (Free verse) by Dovina

When I become god of a far away planet, I’ll set up my world with great beauty and wit. And to keep me from getting too lonely, I’ll make beings to admire my work. My creatures will discover all that I’ve made quite pleasing and right in their finite minds. I’ll show them in love how their world was formed, remove any doubt of who did it or why. Ancient texts on how I created, I’ll not leave about to conflict with evidence for some other way. No, I’ll make plain how to seek me and praise, if they wish to, but never they must. Then they will let me receive them and heal their self-made diseases. That’s the kind of god I will be. Not the unknowable elusive kind.

Goad 24-Jan-05/5:13 PM
ahem, aversion to "thing" considered illfounded?!? You've forgotten our battle of limericks over the word, then, have you?

I'm not sure it's an actual error to use discover as a synonym for the sense of find that means "come to feel", but it certainly is jarring, and by using it so you risk making those readers who possess a finely developed literary sensitivity wince.
I did.
And since I was reading during my morning enstooling, it caused me in fact to inadvertently pinch off a log quite before I was ready to do so. The delicate mopping away of the resulting splashings necessitated my full attention, hence I was unable to complete my perusal of the pome. These are the risks one takes with one's audience when one neglects to adequately ponder proper usage!

English 201:

if you intended "discover" as a synonym for the sense of find that means "come to feel" then:

"My creatures will discover that all I've made
seems quite pleasing and right to their finite minds"

was what you were looking for.

If you intended discover as a synonym for the sense of find that means "judge", the only d-word I'm aware of is "deem":

My creatures will deem all I've made
quite pleasing and right in their finite minds.




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