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Math Poem (Free verse) by Dovina

1-1 = ½-½ 2–2 = 1–1 Taking half from half is the same as taking two from two. ½/1 = 1/2 2/4 = ½/1 Half of a thing is the same as a quarter of two. (Hang in there, follow the symmetry.) 1*1 = ½*2 ¼*4 = 1*1 Half of two things is the same as a quarter of four. ½+1½ = 2+0 1+1 = ½+1½ Two and nothing more is the same as one and one. Subtract, divide, multiply, add. Zero, half, one, two. Can you equate the series? I wish the tools were here to render clearly, math expressions eloquently— integrals, Laplaces, differentials— love, hate, fear. It’s like painting with a greasy finger. I wonder how van Gogh might have written a poem. Yeah, I know— with a gun in a wheat field.

richa 25-Dec-04/11:59 AM
Ace. I am sure shuushin will love you for saying how little logic their appears to his poem. Anyway where were we. Oh yes. All good poems must follow logic or else what are they-- a conveniently stored set of aphorisms. The whole point of a poem is you build up from a number of premises which include the 'poetic bits' to your insight. My criticism of this poem has always been, rather than building a poem from the simple maths premises you at first set out, you set out the maths premises and fail to make the bridge between premise and conclusion. To me you go from 1+1 to love, hate. That is not how you construct a poem. The reason you wrote the poem like this is because you do not fully understand exactly what you are saying.




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