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Interstellar Hell (Other) by PsydewaysTears

Falling stars trickle down my cheek Outlining a damaged physique. They're blinding to the untrained eye But I've learned to black out the sky. My black hole beats an angry rage, Good thing I keep it in its cage. Last time I let it out to play It sucked the sunshine out of day. I wander over Saturn's Rings Thinking I've got a hold on things... But every night at ten to three, Lack of air catches up with me. My Interstellar Hell will swell Until I bid a fond farewell, To falling for the silver gleam; And living life like it's a dream.

Beyond_Dreams 20-Dec-04/9:48 PM
I thought this poem portrayed the meaning very well....It's pretty obvious you're talking about your feelings, 'But I've learned to black out the sky'--Meaning you are holding back and forgetting, almost like one pushes into the darkness of their mind "pain".
This is how I found the poem to be...Maybe a little easily read for me. I mean it has a nice forefront but the inner being of it has been said a million times by other poets. The idea wasn't very original.

Over all though I liked it




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