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Tryst (Limerick) by <~>

Caught in a current, carried Under the moonlight, tarried Washed by the wind Cleansed by our sin Why should I care that you're married?

god'swife 27-Aug-02/10:45 PM
This made me laugh when i read it the first time. I can't figure out why. I think it's fine as is. The past tense verbs work well together. And the self awareness at the end, is like guilt after doing the deed. Moments pleasure vs. lifetime of regret.




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