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Poet, Earth mover (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

As other children bat portently at tetherball and four square a boy walks a hot walk wearing the full weight of his angry red shirt while the heels of his torn bluejeans stir the gravel and dirt that measure the schoolyard fence he pauses only once to mimic the wounded dog howl of a tractors' brakes.

SupremeDreamer 11-Dec-04/4:41 AM
Yes, I like this piece too Intransit, my ol' companion, but there is an issue which bothers me:

potently...

"portently" Is not a word, atleast according to my dictionary, so I believe it's "potently" that you wished to utilize in the poem.

That aside, I bless thee with nine.

Go In Peace Brother...




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