Replying to a comment on:

Digging (Free verse) by Dovina

From digging deep and hacking bold for hells and edens, rust and gold, for brimstone hot and water cold, I’ve dug my last dark empty pit and crawled inside my padded box. Carve for me on polished stone, "She dug all this and left a pile. Look at all the words she wrote."

INTRANSIT 7-Dec-04/6:53 PM
No. but you can still make this better. I think the rythm does work for it. I've given up on I/P. At least until I get my grammar right.




Track and Plan your submissions ; Read some Comics ; Get Paid for your Poetry
PoemRanker Copyright © 2001 - 2024 - kaolin fire - All Rights Reserved
All poems Copyright © their respective authors
An internet tradition since June 9, 2001