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An Afternoon Walk (Free verse) by Dovina

Snow on the ground, shallow and dirty. Up in the trees it’s crusty and clean. Walking and talking, cars kicking dust, it settles still dry on the roadside snow. White seems more bright, in this afternoon light, and dust is not only kicked up by the cars. Snow jokes like a salve and covers his wounds and rambles like honey, sweetening mine. And dust in the snow becomes gaps in his lines or dark flaws in my light-hearted tales. Both are designed to look white and bright, to cover the dark things - dirt and limb. Which are more lofty covering whiter? Which bear the dust of weaker defense?

Dovina 11-Nov-04/6:58 PM
There is no incorrect use of logic, for that would be illogical. And there is no incorrect use of emotion. Each stands on its premises – logic on axioms, emotion on perceptions. A poem that is beautiful and artful usually uses both and blends them in invigorating patterns. How can a poem be anything but surface if it uses only logic? It is like a scientific dissertation. To say “the snow makes me warm” is to apply emotion to “snow is reflective of all frequencies of light, much as the sun is a generator of all.” Jroday is one of those poets who lean much further toward emotion than you and I do. We can learn from them.




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