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An Afternoon Walk (Free verse) by Dovina

Snow on the ground, shallow and dirty. Up in the trees it’s crusty and clean. Walking and talking, cars kicking dust, it settles still dry on the roadside snow. White seems more bright, in this afternoon light, and dust is not only kicked up by the cars. Snow jokes like a salve and covers his wounds and rambles like honey, sweetening mine. And dust in the snow becomes gaps in his lines or dark flaws in my light-hearted tales. Both are designed to look white and bright, to cover the dark things - dirt and limb. Which are more lofty covering whiter? Which bear the dust of weaker defense?

jroday 10-Nov-04/2:36 PM
richa i understand what you are saying, but what work for me to change my life around might not work for anyone else, but we all have our own beliefs in what works and dont works in life. i'm not downing edpeterson, but he never has anything to say or help
anyone if they have a flaw in there poems. he just makes fun of them and a lot of people on this site are trying very hard to become good poem writers including myself. sure your going to have people on this site that's going to have smart remark's,
but they still tell you what you need to do to improve.




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