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Dark Everlasting (Free verse) by Sean Allen

The voice says "let go," but I know I won't let go. So the words, they stick, they're stuck, I'm out of luck, they won't flow. And I slow down. I shake off your praise as I mumble, mumble that I'm not sweet and I'm not being humble; better things for better days. You make me tremble at night. We turn off all the lights and then I'm all right because you can't see and regret. You can't see me so you forget. Let the Dark last forever.

Dovina 9-Nov-04/11:09 AM
The second verse talks about shaking off praise, a hard thing to do, and often necessary. The last line seems contrary to that. I still think it's a good poem, and now you can shake that off too.




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