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A Wanderlust To The New (Sonnet) by fevriere

A snowglint shines. Diana's virgin moon: lighthouse of innocents; a happenstance; a wanderlust for the young, keen and new, who fall on love, and shyly, smally dance. Timid are they, naked the white of eyes. Likewise, they nibble a sliver of sleep Then wake to a whisper of goosepimple. They walk, blank-cheeked, blanketed, and make peep. So what is this thrumming coin on the strand? A pure heart that no-one has touched before. A full moon dragged down like a low balloon. A pale beached pearl on the wide blust'ry shore. humming, "come little one, my Delight! Breathe me a still breath tonight".

Sasha 1-Nov-04/7:16 AM
the ! is unnecessary. Sonnets don't need iambic pentameter, but generally (unless they are blank verse sonnets which yours is plainly not) each line needs to rhyme with at least one other somewhere else in the sonnet....blah blah blah. Okay you don't want to hear the formalist shit.

How about the poem has NO meter whatsoever and desparately cries for one.

Also the subject is a bit cliché




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