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Going Blind (Sonnet) by Sasha

He used to know how blue and purple were different. But now the sundown and blue noon have melted both their colors. All’s a blur, though not yet like the nights that cloud the moon. Sight dim with tears and sickness, he inquires: “H-hun, what color are your eyes?” Her green iris gone pupil-black. By winter, fires only project dim ghosts on a giant screen. While learning to play Braille’s connect-the-dots, and listening to TV in his room, the lids lift for old time’s sake when he spots a thing like a brown mitten in the gloom move back and forth. And his enfeebled eye makes out his hand that waves goodbye.

Dovina 31-Oct-04/12:29 PM
Line 10 is tetrameter. Line 8 seems to have 6 beats. Several lines are iambic only on a stretch of the word. None of the above makes any difference to me.




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