poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on Withering Rose by Imago.

Dovina25 Oct 2004

Some good thoughts here, but lack of precision detracts. In verse 1, beauty does not make things like homes. In vers 2, "and this the state i've found you" doesn't add anything. Verse 3 is good. In Verse 4, "How time has shown it's presence" lacks meaning.. . .