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Zipmark'd (Free verse) by fevriere

Clever you, whiskeysour wakeling, clever your hands slip -pery on the animal of you; on the hip sidewalk. You flush the lavendar veins of your thighs and generally let your inside take pride in bringing to life your corps. Crumbs; all that went on at that Party lasnight was your body and your insides Raging Waking; then the drink put you to bed, so you found your self allclothed, unhid; you let your self dangle over the edge of the bed - extremities growing cold. You were delighted to find that Lust had disappeared overnight and steamed-up windows had come clear.

fevriere 22-Oct-04/4:37 PM
Allclothed is a compound adjective. I like it. It stays.
Slippery slips off the end of the line. I thought you learnt about enjambement the other day? Wasn't it you who was utilisting it so prettily the other day?




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