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endless eternity: (Free verse) by Sapphire

waves crash a steady beat pounding shores in rhyme time suckles of mother natures teat all the while man remains blind the shifting sands run through a slick channel lost souls still wander the ages a taste rolls in mouths of unwary - banal yet they never see they are within cages

poetandknowit 25-Aug-02/8:50 PM
And here I thought this was going to be a descent poem. The title sucks, but the poem opens in okay fashion and then---boom, out of nowhere comes the worst line ever written: "time suckles of mother natures teat." I laughed all the way to the pisser, pissed all over myself from laughing so hard.




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