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Ghost (Free verse) by Caducus

Emptiness has become my communion. Love just a word once said, my empty life filled with confusion from a life I lived so long dead. I can never be seen for who and what I am or what I could have been, A child within a man. A Son to a Father who died, Bastard to a God denied lover of ghosts inside, And truth teller of cotton dweller Who said she loved me but lied. I am going home, back to sleep with stapled eyes. I am going alone, but do not weep I will visit you in sleep in beautiful dreams As a child I’ll rise.

sir_heff 24-Sep-04/8:15 AM
i love lines 12 and 13, thats great.
gave ya an 8 cause the end is kinda out of place




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