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C. Morgenstern: Gentle Songs (Free verse) by yonderland

Gentle songs I sing for you by night, songs that no-one's mortal ear can hear, nor a star that may be shining bright, nor the Moon that glides in silent gear; To whom nothing but the heart of mine, that can dream them, listens wistfully, and in whom no thing except the pain, that evokes them, can indulge for me. Gentle songs I sing for you by night, you, in whose eyes sank my sense and mind, from their core, deep down and out of sight my soul drank one longing of its kind.

yonderland 16-Sep-04/1:24 PM
Yes, I was so busy with the rhymes that I dropped the syntax! ;-) As for the "silent gear," I think it is more appropriate than trying to be direct; the "ether" thing didn't seem to work for me when I tried out the alternatives.
Thanks for the hints, I'll amend the translation as more comments come in. Suggestions are welcome. Best regards, Ralf




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