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Delicate Was (Free verse) by klosterfobik

Just when my unmeant imagination thought it safe, just when I thought I'd learned - to forget to remember the suntanned symmetry of you; I happened upon a tragical trace of a scent of past perfume - a sickening sweet, redolent relic, of almost - always past, left upon a pillow on the unmade bed where once we laid and dreamt and shuddered. Just that one slippery, apple-green breath of delicate was stole truth from time and past from fate. So long it seems - an age ago, maybe even longer, so hard to tell these days - harder still to tell these days from dreams - dreams of together - perfect and peculiar us.

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 15-Sep-04/2:41 PM
Yes, but then he's using 'was' as a noun. Which he denies. Which is the whole motherfucking point. There is nothing wrong with using 'was' as a noun for poetic effect - e e bummings does stuff like that in some of his poemes (e.g 'anyone lived in a pretty how town'). But to use 'was' as a noun whilst thinking you're using it as an adverb is obviously bosh.




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