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Delicate Was (Free verse) by klosterfobik

Just when my unmeant imagination thought it safe, just when I thought I'd learned - to forget to remember the suntanned symmetry of you; I happened upon a tragical trace of a scent of past perfume - a sickening sweet, redolent relic, of almost - always past, left upon a pillow on the unmade bed where once we laid and dreamt and shuddered. Just that one slippery, apple-green breath of delicate was stole truth from time and past from fate. So long it seems - an age ago, maybe even longer, so hard to tell these days - harder still to tell these days from dreams - dreams of together - perfect and peculiar us.

zodiac 13-Sep-04/3:19 AM
Hey, congratulations on replying to your own comment, and in an extraordinary dim fashion matched only by the dimness of your original comment. Let's leave it at this, klosterfobik: If was was an adverb, it would still be improperly used, since a) an adjective (like "delicate") can't modify an adverb, b) you're using it as a noun, and c) IT'S NOT AN ADVERB, dumbass, it's a linking verb (i.e., a form of 'to be'). Dim, dim, dim




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