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Soft and Pure (Free verse) by Dovina

I couldn’t tell how things registered with him when our eyes locked easily in languorous embrace. I thought I could, stroking his brows of sandy shade, that earliest smoothness with mustache and hair graying. The hair beneath my fingertips, felt incredibly soft and smooth. Pure. A belief, a certainty? They did happen - those eyes, those brows, obligated as I feel to call them a dream, waking up slowly into history and another set of brows.

Dan garcia-Black 10-Sep-04/8:09 AM
"Stroking his brows of sandy shade,
that earliest smoothness
with mustache and hair graying."

The poem starts here for me.

"A belief, a certainty?"

Everything you are trying to say in the first 2 1/2 lines should be told in this line.
Love the last stanza.
But criticism aside. It's a -10- as is.




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