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Love (Other) by ChefKSP

Love is confusing, when you open your heart and yet isn't touched, Your heart is forever searching for that eligant touch of a gurl's voice to sooth ur lost soul, as it echos throughout your mind taunting your feelings, when you think u've found love you find your mind play's tricks, Your Revealed feelings only prolongs the time till your heart is broken once again, Your actions are the only thing that is remebered by a gurl you once loved, Your always lost for words but you'll never lose your feelings, Your Feelings are the only true thing that you ever meant, You’ll never forget feelings you had or felt for another, You’ll always remember the day we connected like non other, You’ll Wanna become more then just friends for another, You’ll Feel inside your heart and find it’s filled to the top with happiness and laughter, Chef KSP

Sasha 9-Sep-04/6:25 PM
Aww. How distinctively pathetic.

Your Revealed feelings only prolongs the time till your heart is broken
once again??

What the fuck is that? I believe you meant "prolong" and not "prolongs." Actually, you might want to take that whole line out. Or maybe you want to take the whole stanza; it adds nothing to the poem. Actually, just take out the entire poem. It adds nothing to this site.




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