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Pride (Free verse) by Dovina

Sometimes the way my mother looks at me, I feel she knows more than she says. For, though there are times I long to creep in to her in the night And talk about love, and cry, I’m glad I never have. About such matters, a daughter should have pride And settle for knowing she knows.

Dovina 6-Sep-04/8:11 AM
“she” in the last line is ambiguous. It could mean either the daughter or the mother. If it means the daughter than the line is trite. If it means the mother than the daughter knows the mother knows. “creep into the uterus” doesn’t quite work with the next line: “And talk about love, and cry.” I often give an 8 or below when I don’t understand a poem. This one deserves a 2.




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