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Center Of The Universe (Free verse) by Dovina

When I think how each small life Feels itself the center of the universe, How sunshine, rain, or food is good or bad, Depending on need, How conditions carry different meanings, For each thing that lives, I fill with wonder and despair At how the world ends A thousand times a minute. If I crush an insect, The sun is blotted out, The stars fall, The earth is shattered, For ever and ever. The universe ceases to be For that living thing. But of course it was only an insect.

Dovina 27-Aug-04/9:39 AM
That poet would see past the trivia, would occasionally notice the value, even comment on the worth, i.e.:

“I can't think of how to re-word it, though. Sorry I can't be more help; it's a cute little rhyme.”

“Some of this is really nice. The rhythm, though, is so almost-regular it really hits you where it's not. Other than that, good.”

“’To so confuse the daffodils’ would be better said ‘That so confuses daffodils?’ Otherwise, swell. 10”

“I think the clinical sound of 'goal' is great.”

“It's a companion piece for richa's dandelion clocks, maybe - and heavier on the Darwinism, which is ace. ‘Seeds are the goal’ is the best description of flowers I've read in a long time.”

“I'm reversing myself. Clothes is fine, but you need an extra syllable or two: ‘The best art only clothes the truth’ would do.”

I miss that poet.




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