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Corner of 30th and Tibbs (Free verse) by klosterfobik

There couldn't be in these streets, of hoped for death and rain slicked dark, the possibility of the recent-new of guiltless lovers. And it seems in these windless alley ways of again and shadows, there could never be a child's smile. Hard to imagine the symmetry of sweet kind eyes looking into mine (big and brown), beneath the dim-yellow of street lamp's watch. Cannot believe the asphalt dusk and dreams, of these accusing cracked sidewalks, ever let sympathy pass. Was there ever unbroken or unfaded in these still gray streets of since forgotten? And will there ever be on these streets of hoped for death and rain slicked dark, the chance of a child's smile or the recent - new of guiltless lovers?

klosterfobik 22-Aug-04/7:39 PM
You make a decent point dark one,but literate does not mean those who know how to puncuate,it means - literally one who knows
how to read and write or educated in a particular field or one who is literary or well written.So before you spew your ignorant opinion try to understand that others wright their deep - true emotions first and then think about puncuation.I'll agree I'm very lacking when it comes to grammar and puncuation,but I have studied and love the written
word and is that not what matters most?Is poetry not grace,beauty and harmony?Would an unaccomplished Van Gough's brush stroke be less artistic?Would truth be false if it was not puncuated properly?Accidence lives far past our renovation.
And as to wallyish - sorry about your luck and life.




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