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Marina (Haiku) by INTRANSIT

Early morning fog filters through tall masts waiting brushing tight furled sheets

Dan garcia-Black 5-Aug-04/8:53 AM
I think that Zodiac once(perhaps more) refered to me as a "dimtard.' If that comment had been in regard to my comment on this poem, I would have to agree. Yeah, I see what you mean about the masts brushing. Don't know about haiku commas but there should be a natural caesura at the end of each line. If I had read more carefully, I might have caught the masts waiting and the sheets brushing. Too much lack of Alcohol last night. Three weeks and counting the seconds.




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