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The bad news is his bones are like rubber (Free verse) by Venus

“The good news is nothing is broken,” she says. When I don’t run out of meds it’s easy, you see “C - A - T” Left to my own devices, though you lost me at “C” “The bad news is his bones are like rubber,” she says, with an audible hint of condemnation.

Shuushin 29-Jul-04/5:53 PM
Maybe too cryptic. I can see how it might cathartic somehow, but - "what's in it for me?"

"audible hint of condemnation"... what is that, exactly?

Interesting even after my gripes, has a nice cadence - I just want it to mean something without too much trouble (some, is fine).




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