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Dignity (Other) by kthulah

Of course I love you! Is that not clear as day? I just don't feel that love is stable ground On which to base the dream of a pursuit The climax being but a haughty laugh. So let me love you gently from afar Without a need to selfishly acquire Without convincing you what I am worth For knowing mine already is enough. It is a given that if you were mine That I would treat you better than the rest But men, appreciation do not fire It is infatuation that they crave. So though I love you more than dignity My dignity preserved is more than naught.

Christof 23-Aug-02/5:50 AM
I like the argument of this - it is very sonnet-like, and so is the 14-line form although you've not gone for a rhyme scheme. I'm not sure the final couplet convinces though - plainly the narrator doesn't love this person more than their dignity, rather, they are afraid of rejection I would think. After all, it is easier to love from afar than to test your love on the 'front line'.




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