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Vows (Free verse) by QuirkyWonder

If these walls could talk They'd tell me all the things you say Inside your private thoughts I would not be so afraid Afraid of what the future holds Binding us together Your whispered words mean nothing Without my trust and understanding The look in your eyes is convincing I'm mesmerized by your charm Nothing is forever Because forever always ends This experience will last a lifetime Because as of now We are one.

Dovina 12-Jul-04/10:19 AM
The last three lines don't make sense. cliches abound. Try for originality.




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