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The Sands Of Time (Free verse) by squall1leonheart

As I sit here wanting to cry,I find no joy in my life and want to die.I hear something,I look,and Isee what is to happen to me,for i am lost in the sands of time.As i walk through the sands of time,in the hourglass of life,I feel my self start to feel fear grow in my heart,and it seems i can not go on.And as i gather up my strength,and my courege,I start to walk agin,and i see a wonderful sight,all that is holy has come to rescue me,but that sight turns to fear,as I see wickedness aprouch me, reach for my heart,but the it disapers.I am houlisanating in the sands of time,And as i walk,wondering if my life would get any better,i wonder if i can escape this prison of sand,but find no exit.as I sit,rigt here in the middle of this prision,I no there is no escape.As of now,I know I will not escape.I know I will die in the sands of time.

Brittanyy 6-Jul-04/10:53 AM
How are you writing about wanting to die at 11 years old? You haven't experienced enough to know anything about depression. This poem contradicts the other poem you wrote. In your other poem you talk about how you're not one of those depressed people and in this poem you seem suicidal? Whatever kid.




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