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War of kites and fireflies (Free verse) by fevriere

War of kites and fireflies buffeted on the breath that skates the hill enlivening grass blades, shaking trees. The prized sky is violet. The razed haze of high English summer refuses to move, like an incense-hued church. The almost-steel night thieves gold. The death of the day spells magic, scattering letters of coal-coloured songbirds wheeling and reeling above.

richa 4-Jul-04/5:34 AM
Like this too, the incense bit was confusing yes. And 'The almost-steel night thieves gold.' I can see where you are going but as a single sentence is difficult to grasp. But yes did I say I like it.




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