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ILLusion in Falsity (Free verse) by Sugar Victim

She doesn't understand why It seems an endless pattern going from guy to guy They're great,they love her but not too long Then theres some exuse like this is all so wrong Maybe it's her She just has bad luck The guys she loves are always worthless fucks And you'd think there'd be something to keep it in check besides a good lay and a kiss on the neck So she sets herself up for those in a glass case fiddles with the lock and goes for the chase whos to blame? It's really quite clear the one holding her heart and swallowing her fear

boldsilence 25-Jun-04/6:27 PM
I like this. It's harsh and blunt, but I like that it's straight-forward. The rhymes don't really distract the reader eithre, especially at the end. At the beginning, they were kind of shoddy, but it's okay, because the poem was good. I really enjoyed this. I hope to see another one like it...

-Nichole-

P.S. - I'd appreciate it if you'd take a look at one of my poems too.




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