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deep (Free verse) by bxjay170

how deep can my deep love be its so deep when i think of you i can't sleep its so deep i cant eat or speak you say my love's not real,but its deeper then sea dam can't you see what u do to me its with you i only wonna be your name is branded on my heart even if we are so far apart but our love doesnt have a end because everyday a new and stronger one starts you give me 100% satisfaction i shouldnt say no more words cause love is not demostrated by words but by actions since you left my life's no longer clear its full of confusion and static

markmarkmarkmark 25-Jun-04/4:25 PM
spelling and grammar aren't what poetry is about, but the lack of them distracts from the message. All that aside, I could see the feeling behind this. Avoid cliche - deeper _than_ the sea, is not a fresh image.




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