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Hunny (Free verse) by Venus

Since you changed my name to Hunny, the kitchen has become a place for cooking, not fucking. No longer on the counter, before dining elsewhere. Don't drink too much wine, or stay up much too late. No longer care to fall asleep wrapped in my legs, soaking wet. Still sometimes, you quietly maul me, middle of the night, as I feign sleep; little noise but for your labored breath. I wonder sometimes, I wonder If I dreamt it. Since you changed my name to Hunny, I prepare your dinner each and every night, and pause at the stains on that cheap counter top, and thoughtfully consider, poisoning your drink.

alexander 22-Aug-02/9:31 AM
I liked this because it speaks the truth that no one dare speak. I disagree with Babbit our master poet, the ending was good, pulling it all together. Did you kill him ? I'm definitely up for the counter top, the floor, the bed with him sleeping through the whole thing as we get wet with those legs of yours wrapped round us both !




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