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driven (Free verse) by ThePariahDog

left sometimes hanging, baking often caught in the twilight between nine and twelve right on the emergency lever protecting myself from aggravating nonsense which puts me on the edge of all out war touch and go objectives make the waypoints clear and spur an obsidian chariot forward devil driven influences enable an inner calmness that prevails regardless of phenolic squealing swinging my head to glance behind emptiness fills a necessary blindspot surrounding air permissibly drags me to a halt tires rebelling against the lethargic summer heat slowing only for hellish signals persistently barring my expedient passage

god'swife 9-Jun-04/5:24 PM
That's it, I'm gonna kill somebody.

What are you trying, in your own ridiculously long-winded and formless way, to say here? This is clearly about absolutely nothing! What, you went for a drive on a really hot day?

Touch and go objectives????

Devil driven influences inable an inner calmness??
How?

Surrounding air permissisibly drags you? What, do you live at 40 ATMS?

This is hopeless.




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