god'swife9 Jun 2004

You know there are some fantastic images here, but then you drown them in muck.

That first stanza is romantic and quite musical intil thee last line. reminds me of Garcia Lorca and than at the end it's like eating the last peanut in the Cracker Jacks and it tastes all rotten and soggy. Do you take writing poetry seriously, or are here because your bored?

Her vanilla gown was lifted. I like that line. it has a nice assonance.