INTRANSIT8 Jun 2004

first read: swap -noticing and ignoring-
then- with wry misery (he's already exuding)
clambered? I think you mean -clammy?
doomed (seams)?

Um that's enough for now. I see serious problems but I also saw the whole picture, I do like it.
Particularly, arrogant wind and gray expressions sauntering. Work this one, it's worth it.