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cold sonnet (Sonnet) by <~>

Cedars breathe, slower than the grasses but not so slow as stones. Paled, the verdance of their scratching splits short days, cracks bones. With wails whispered half gone, colorless wind catches avian darts in current, hurling winged survivors into blues gone white, ochres greyed; in piney hearts and bared burls they find frozen comfort for the night. There is shelter here, in marooned evergreen a deepened slumber, a breaking dream where iced veins thicken, strain, and woody muscles burn, entrain the rhythm of a soiled heart: waiting, watching is their part. (edit 8/21/02)

<~> 21-Aug-02/12:53 PM
i think my problem is that i spend a lot of time in my head. my thoughts wrap themselves in polysyllabic mantles; i think with those words. you're not the first to mention that my words are too complex to flow. i tried to work on that, to simplify the description in a rewrite of secret, admirer. did you see the first version?




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