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floating (Free verse) by tre

I've lost myself again I've fallen into my head I'm floating along a string of thoughts story after story, I make-up my own endings I go where I wanna go Escaping my body, my shackles, my guilt for wanting the other guy Escaping my inability to please myself Escaping the unfortunate knowledge of knowing there's not enough money Escaping my stress, my insecurities, my lonliness I don't want your arms around me no more I keep my eyes towards the sky Waiting to be pulled up out of it all Suddenly the gate closes He's here to pick me up I close my journal, take off my headphones and pretend I want to take his hand out into a world I don't understand. A world I'm floating in.

god'swife 30-May-04/2:53 PM
what's wrong with your poem is what's wrong with 99.9% of poem's her, nothing happens. It's boring.




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