babbit1121 Aug 2002

This is a solid poem. The image is strong and has the weight of solid imagery behind it. The only thing I do not like is the ending. I do not know why. It fits, I suppose, but the images are so strong in the beginning, especially the sleeping portion and the repetitive use of wonder (excellent), that the end almost comes as being anti-climatic. I feel like I am being told something I want to be shown; does that make any sense. I'll read it again in a few days and see if it still hits me that way. But this is solid, and it is good to see some quality on the site.