Poemranker [Replying] Sat Apr 27 14:19:22 PDT 2024

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Suicide of the Ego (Free verse) by Drifting Shadow

Every day of the life you have walked, Has lead you to this step of steps, To step into the abyss, The abyss of nothing. It looks dark in there, It looks light out here, but it is as it is, and it is the same. For the years of fear and pain, Hanging on by your fingernails, Thinking, wanting, tryingâ¦ To die. When all along you knew you couldnât. Who would of thought? That now you have seen your worth, Now you have seen your potential, And you have decided to live, That the only way to do that is death, Not for your body, Kill your ego, See nothing, But truly see it. Be nobody, And grow again what did not wither. You fear what you will see, When you step into the abyss. You fear what you will see, When you step out of the abyss. But that fear has been outgrown, By the fear of the world you created.

zodiac

26-May-04/7:14 PM

Oh dear!

*wipes tears*

You have got all our numbers, haven't you?

Well, check out this hook, homesketch:

No one has said anything about not being able to understand this "piece," dig? There is, in fact, nothing in this poem to understand or not understand; it's a soggy catalogue of useless phrases used exceptionally poorly. You have, in fact, no idea how the various cliche-o-mat-produced lines of this so-called poem fit together at all, and truth be told, they simply don't. One moment you have your character walking "every day" to the edge of the abyss, the next you have him stepping into it, and the next hanging on by his fingernails.

Now, bearing in mind that he's supposed to be doing this EVERY DAY, please answer the following question to the best of your ability:

Tomorrow, this poem's central character will be
A) Walking to an abyss,
B) Stepping into an abyss,
C) Hanging by his fingernails above an abyss.

Or D) "Trying... to die", presumably by plunging himself into the abyss (which would be easier if he weren't hanging so hard onto the edge.

PS-Your comment is an utter joke. "youâre probably all sitting there now thinking about some crap like you been through such a hard and cruel life that you poor little minds can't find peace within them" is the best part.

PPS-Your response to this is also bound to be an utter joke. My vote is that it will be the "look beneath the words, don't be so literal" breed of indignant reply, at which point you will have failed before you even started.

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