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Only I wish I could say.. (Free verse) by PunkyPanda

I can't go on without you, I'm too weak. I can't say those words to you, they're too hard to speak. Am I that good at hiding the secret, the one between two friends? The friends you said we'd be until the very end? It's time for me to come outwith it, but I don't think I can. I'm afraid of losing our friendship, I, which you will ban My breath's getting shorter, faster beats my chest. I come out with "I" but I can't say the rest. Your eyes grow weary, you put your arm around me. I look in your eyes, and suddenly I can see. That what I want to say to you, you want to say to me. I finally say "love" and the whole world slows down. the last word, I need say, before in my fears I drown. "You" there, it's out, I can breath, I can feel my heart again. Will we still be friends 'till the very end? I look at you once more in your eyes so blue, Then I hear the sweetest words ever, "I love you too"

sliver 24-May-04/9:10 PM
the third stanza is um, no bueno, si? other than that, probably a 6 or 7.




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