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Reflections of the Living Dead (Other) by SomeKindofPoet

Two tired eyes that fail to sleep, Two crying eyes that fail to weep, Two bloodshot eyes that fail to see The worthless lies you sang to me. And here I’m mourned in sad lament For all the days ‘twere wasted spent On fools and jobs and worthless things Like pearl balls and diamond rings. To me is sung the funeral song For such a life which died so long ago. Perhaps one day you’ll learn and see That all you ever did to me Was lead me to a life I hate Where now I’ve died a reprobate, Loving that I’ve hated still While laid to rest upon the hill Where wasted lives are littered there Under headstones worn coarse and bare. Perhaps one day I’ll rise from death And breathe again that precious breath That fills these bags of flesh and blood With life and love and all that should Have been the thing to drive this brain Before it thought that it could change Into a beast to never die No matter how you’d ever try To hurt it, beat it, leave it dead By all the piercing things you said. But here I lay, the living dead, Blood pumping, still, into my head, Where thoughts and hopes and all my dreams Remain entrapped behind my seams.

SomeKindofPoet 22-May-04/9:32 AM
Well, to fit the form of the "golden rule," I can't believe that this place is full of pretentious idiots. Of course, bad assumption on my part, no doubt. The whole world is full of ‘em, so why wouldn’t this place be? Anyway, what I've seen in the past two days is enough to tell me that the mind set of many of these people, zodiac and Dark_Angel for most, is rather narrow and poorly assumptive. Both keep believing that this poem is about "religion" or a lost love, broken heart, etc. Can it be? Sure. It can deal with many area's of life, but for two self-claimed geniuses to keep believing that it merely deals with two areas of life shows their incompetence for a wider range of thought. One, this poem never has the words “religion” or “god” anywhere. Maybe you believed it was about love because it seems to be directed at one person? Well, why does it have to be a person at all? Or maybe you thought it was a broken-hearted love poem because of just the word “love,” even though we love many things other than that of our “true love.” This poem can deal with religion, this poem can deal with love, but the main focus was a wasted life (seen by the last two lines). And whoever said my theology was wrong...prove that it is. Also, whoever didn’t understand why I used “seams” then must not remember Frankenstein (which, I assumed, would be so simple to get). So, I now know that even the educated can’t deduce a poem worth a flip...making poemranker.com a rather worthless place to get a good, useful opinion on poetry.




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