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Amazing Grace ~ for all bass drummers ;) (Free verse) by Celticai
“Yes, it’s better than…. Yes, it’s better than…. Yes, it’s better than….” Feel the beat and the heat The thrum of the drum It resonates, permeates, exonerates My soul. Urging, surging, purging My mind. Overlaid with the haunting tones of the pipes Returning to my Celtic roots of the Rowan Tree Hitting, beating, brushing, caressing The goatskin head Hips sway, a distant place Hands play, soul’s grace “Yes, it’s better than…. Yes, it’s better than…. Yes, it’s better than…. SEX!”

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.25
Weighted score: 5.1490035
Overall Rank: 5297
Posted: October 6, 2008 2:00 PM PDT; Last modified: October 6, 2008 2:00 PM PDT
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[7] Dovina @ 75.82.253.189 | 6-Oct-08/4:56 PM | Reply
I'd leave out the yes's only because it sounds more like a drum without them. Most of the lines have a drum beat, but a few don't, like "Overlaid with the haunting tones of the pipes" Not that they all have to, but it would be nice.
[n/a] Celticai @ 123.211.253.133 | 6-Oct-08/4:58 PM | Reply
Thanks.. Although the "Yes, it's better than..." are actually a rhythm that I use to play a calypso beat to Amazing Grace.
[8] Bethy @ 165.154.46.134 | 14-Oct-08/8:26 AM | Reply
totally fun Drummah !!!
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