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Consider the Grass (Free verse) by Dovina

A single leaf from internode wraps, protects a tender stem, leans out to catch the sun. Efficient, simple structure, entwines the neighbors’ roots, sways to wind and rain. East of piney Rockies, west of hardwood Ozarks, Grassland rules the Plain. Buffalo trampled, cattle shaved, entombed by plow and road resilient grass comes creeping back. A lesson rhizomes teach: without its gripping roots, a bare and sterile dustbowl. Today they’re clipping seeds in windy western Kansas taking in the winter wheat, filling world trade centers, skyscrapers on the plain, a gift of grassy grain, Like an ant beside a cola can, I pedal past the Grigston Co-Op in awe of mother grass.

lmp 2-Jul-07/9:23 AM
i do like the rhythm that (it appears) you have tweaked. whatever, it works well with the theme.

i hear the wind on this prairie, the soft subtle moaning through the blades as they rustle, bending and sweeping their neighbors.

i also like the slow outward zoom, if you will, going from micro to macro, although if this was intentional, there are a few places where it breaks the progression: s3 & s5 zoom much further out.

something about the last stanza is uncomfortable. i guess putting yourself into the piece brings the image of the expanse of the prairie to bear, but doesn't sit well with me. much in the same way that some tlevision commercials will lead in with some awe-inspiring imagery, only to ruin the effect by presenting their product. but that is personal preference...

still, a great piece. thanks.




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