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A Perfectly Normal Man (Free verse) by Dovina

He speaks to me two languages— audible affection, and mute tempestuous desire. He respects me as two people— moral woman, and capable lover. He sees me with double vision— close friend, and a warm set of hips. He touches me with mixed sensations— brotherly kindness, and hungry lust. He’s enamored and frustrated— happy and unhappy, respecting and wanting. He’s made that way— I adore his kindness, admire his restraint.

Ranger 1-Oct-06/1:24 PM
The thing is, this is a very 'general' poem. It's the classic 'nice guy' syndrome, only from the perspective of a woman - I just feel that if it were made more specific, it would lose some of its ability to connect with me as a reader. As it stands, it's one of those poems that gets a 'I hear ya!' response from me, whereas if the protagonist was talking about a short, blonde dude then I wouldn't connect with it as such. Usually I'm all for image overload, but occasionally I like to do the colouring in myself.




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