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The Dovina Memorial Bike Lane (Free verse) by Dovina

----Buried in this ground---- ashes of the founder remains of the defier bequeathed to the City for burial here by one who covertly abused her job Drafter Dovina the Drafter to subvert City officials disobey her boss and bring this bike lane before a public meeting whereupon its need was realized and the city acquiesced Dedicated April 1, 20xx by the repentant Carpinteria City Council

Dovina 27-Sep-06/8:49 PM
Thanks for getting back to this. I agree that “whereupon” is too long and legal. I’ll change it to “where its need was realized.” The used-abused decision falls, at least to me, to abused, because her act was abuse of her responsibility. Again, let me say that I expect no Edna-countering in anybody’s vote. Please vote as you rate the poem.




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